22上海中考冲刺英语写作主题修炼之从低档

2022年新课标下的冲刺上海中考英语写作内功修炼

（1）新课标下对学生的英语能力的灵活运用的考核又上升了一个台阶,。如明面上的词汇量上升到2000+，就是一个最好的实例。

（2）新课标下学生的听说能力要求进一步提高，上海中考听说测试2023年开始将从目前的10分增加到15-20分，用来筛选学生的意图更明显。

（2）上海初中英语从2023年开始将改版，目前用了将近20年的牛津教材将成为历史，而高中教材已于2020年率先改版，对学生的能力要求更上不止一个台阶，大家自己可以去看下。

今天开始发几位基础中等初三学生的作文修改（坐标：宝山杨浦区内最普通的公办的学校之一，一模定位：120分左右）

只有同辈作文，才能深有感触；只有对比原文和我的修改稿，才能懂得写作之道。请珍惜最干货！

2.An act of (为清洁工提供食物和水篇）

学生原稿： 得分：7+6+1=14分 B档

An act of is very to us it can make us feel very .

Last week I saw a the .It was a very hot day so he very ,hot and .He to have the .Then I to give him a hand.I a of milk tea for him.He was so that he me.

An act of me feel very and I am glad to do kind.

我的修改稿： (完全根据学生原文内容基础上的小修改，请仔细对照，并比较区别)

得分至少为：8+7.5+3.5=19分 A档

An act of not only a in need, but also a who help a of .

Last week，I was home when I saw a the . As it was a hot day, he a lot and was wet all over. He very and and to have his job. When I was why he didn't stop to some and take a rest, I his on the .Then I to give him a hand. I a of iced tea from the shop and him some of my that I had for . I also lied to him that I had had for . He my and food and me over and over .

When I saw him food and with a on his face in the , I felt so and was of my act of .